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The passion that once filled my heart and veins,
That once fueled all my love and pain,
Now flows away, a pale picture of the past.
Memento Morituri, and in the depths I’m cast.

A pale passion, a picture of my blood,
A sickening shade of red, fading like it should.
A river of my blood, released from body’s chain,
Leaving little but my memory of pain.

The pain is sweeter than the pleasure,
Because I know the pain is real.
This life I can no longer treasure,
There is nothing left for me to feel.

Knocks on the door, shrill shouts of fear,
I do not care, my place is here.
And in my life path’s final bend,
I was glad to see the end.
:icontar1988:
memento mori= remember the dead.
memento morituri= remember those about to die. Remember is not a perfect translation here. memento means literally 'to keep in the mind for a short period'
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:iconpyrox666xpheebs:
This is truly breath taking :heart:
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:icontar1988:
glad you like it :)
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:icontaliionis:
Excellent rhyme and rhythm.
You seem to be an excellent poet.
Great writing.

Faved.
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:iconthoraxtheimpalor:
i love the poem...but i have to say that this line "I do not care, my place is here." just jumped at me and started to yell profanities in my face..... for some reason i think it needs something... but then again i am not the best at poetry so i could be very wrong.... so don't worry bout me.
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:icontar1988:
I know it needs something, but after a fierce battle that lasted at least a few seconcs, I accepted the fact that i couldn't come up with anything better.
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:iconthoraxtheimpalor:
happens to us all......
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~canticum Oct 14, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Third stanza :nod: nice job
whole thing has a good rhythem
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!pigeonpyro Oct 11, 2007   Photographer
Oh wow, that was dark and terrible, yet amazing and beautiful. As always the flow and rhythm were excellent, but this time your descriptions were gruesome and vivid, a clear picture as create din the readers mind and the poem was easy to follow and understand what was going on, so really great job! :clap: :hug:
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