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Tick.

Shamelessly,
remorselessly,
the seconds tick away.

Does it matter ?

Would it change one fucking thing
if Time would skip a moment or two ?

You know, just for a laugh.

Tick.

Another moment
Pointlessly wasted like all the others.

I really should be doing something now.

Tick.

Time just keeps on ticking the seconds away,
like it doesn’t matter.
It probably doesn’t,
but that’s not the point.

Actually, what is the point ?

Tick.

Silently, I watch the clock.
Listen to the delicate machinery, eating away what is left of my day.
Almost dark now, but nobody seems to notice.
Or care.

After all, does it really matter ?

Tick.

The sky is a perfect shade of blue now.

You know, that very deep kind of blue you get in a cloudless sky when you are looking up with nothing left to do and no place left to go because it is nearly night now and Tick. you have got hours left before you go to the party and there is this huge gap in between moments and you are wondering what the point is though you know that the point doesn’t really matter at this stage because the party will be great and She will be there Tick. and you can’t wait but you sort of got to because turning up three hours early would be a bit rude and after all she won’t be there yet so what is the point and your thoughts drift away and you have Tick. this feeling in your belly that you always get when thinking of her though you doubt that she knows that but maybe she does because girls are just psychic like that and that is not really a secret and really where is that next tick Tick. oh yes there it is and is it nearly time no damnit it is not and why can’t you speed time up a bit that would be so awesome and oh sod it, I’ll ring her up.


Tick.
©2008-2009 ~Tar1988
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:iconaway-from-me:
Aww :) Tar is in like?
These lines: "Listen to the delicate machinery, eating away what is left of my day." "The sky is a perfect shade of blue now. You know, that very deep kind of blue you get in a cloudless sky when you are looking up with nothing left to do and no place left to go because it is nearly night now and Tick." are wonderful. :)

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:icontar1988:
It was largely fictional, really. :)

But glad you like it !

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:iconaway-from-me:
Oh really.. in that case I like it even more, it's quite a talent to be able to make fiction sound quite so... convincing and personal. Hm, yes, j'aime beaucoup.

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:coffeemachine: Because nothing says love like your very own coffeemachine.

Ask me about barnacles, you won't regret it. (sometimes, it is what you've got, not just where you stick it.)
:iconxxsillygirlxx:
lol I love it. XD Aside from the wonderful writing itself, I love the layout of the words. : ) You know--not anything in particular, but just the way it looks all together. I'm a big fan of nice, spaced out writing. XD

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:icontennisbollen:
Great, simply; great. I too love the "Listen to the delicate machinery, eating away what is left of my day." line, it is beautiful. I like how the last paragraph unfolds, it flows fast and you get those ticks in it that kind of... holds you up for a second (excuse the pun).

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Don't be ashamed of who you are, be ashamed of who I am instead.

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:icontennisbollen:
Oh, and "Would it change one fucking thing
if Time would skip a moment or two ?" feels very Tar-ish. :D

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Stay Alive!

Don't be ashamed of who you are, be ashamed of who I am instead.

"Not that I detest extraterrestrials but I believe it is much easier to socialize with the population of Earth."
:icontar1988:
:) thanks man, glad you like it !

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:icontar1988:
thanks bro :)

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